I'll just get right to this,
The storyline: None obviously, just a bunch of dancing that was unfunny, or creative in any way. A storyline is something you should actully include in any basic flash....but this isn't a flash so wtf is it doing here?
Graphics/video: Umm...its you lip synching to a song... what more information could I possibly give about this other than the fact it was choppy?
Sound/Music: No sound, and one song. I thought the song before this was odd but I could withstand listening to a few minutes of it, but when it's crossed with some 12 year old trying to be famous and acting like a dork, it just won't work.
Other: This is Newgrounds, a FLASH WEBSITE! Videos like this belong to YOU TUBE, don't confuse the two.
Suggestions: Yes I watched the whole thing and was annoyed entirely from the fact you dancing like a dork to a blastphomas song. What you should do, delete this and post it on youtube since this isn't flash, put some actual effort in your flashes/videos, don't show your face in a video ever again. I felt I was watching some sort of cheap kitty porn throughout the movie.
How you could improve this: You can't really, but in FLASHES that you create on NEWGROUNDS instead of VIDEOS that should be posted on YOUTUBE, you should
a)Put some effort into the flash
b)give it a storyline
c) more sounds/effects/songs
d)make a decent script
e) actully work a bit on the graphics
Oh and also, don't be another Numa Numa wannabe, there will be no more popularity coming from videos like that anymore. That was a long time ago when people thought the internet was bs and well....look at it now!
Overall: a frustrating song, and aggrivating character, absolutely no plot, a cliche.
P.s.: If your going to make a video, it still needs a plot even for a music video, and it needs to be LESS OF AN AGGRIVATING CLICHE.
If your going to make a video, give it a plot, good characters, a fine setting, great sounds and effects, and GOOD ACTORS.
Oh and submit it to YOUTUBE NOT NEWGROUNDS.
I'll say it once more,
Newgrounds is a Flash Site
Youtube is a Video Site
You are at the WRONG SITE